Thursday, July 4

Rivulet



A flash of beauty,
The crack of dawn,
Shimmering sun's ray,
The scent of rain.

A surreal soundtrack
Or a soulful note ;
They take me back
And leave me sour.

I tried my best 
To make you mine;
The fire in me
But,burnt me whole.

I let you go
As someone told
For if only you sought
You were mine.

 Counting tides
I waited days
But no one came
Nor anyone spoke.

Why didn't you notice
That i was gone ?
My screams had echoed 
Through mountain mounds.

Tears rolled down
Formed eddy streams,
Till my rivulet grew
And left you far.

Wasn't he right ?
Who faithfully said;
That things sans reclaim
Were never truly ours to claim.

And that was when
It struck me hard;
That life was such -
So undeniably real!
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46 comments:

  1. Very poignant and touching poem.

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    1. Thank you for finding time to read it Usha ma'm . .

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  2. Till my rivulet grew.
    lovely lines.

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  3. Very warm...
    liked it a lot....
    "The fire in me / But burnt me whole"... Wah wah...!
    ending is too good :-)

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  4. For if only you sought
    Then you were mine...

    Heartfelt.

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  5. The poem captures a vast sweep of emotions....Life is so undeniably real is just not a factual statement but hammers something deeper inside.....a signature line!

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    1. I am deeply honoured Geeta ma'm. Thank you so much for the constant support !

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  6. Nice, touching composition.It's so poignant that I get moved.

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  7. Why didn't you notice
    That i was gone ?
    My screams had echoed
    Through mountain mounds.

    Truly soulful. No words.

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    1. Seeing you after long Neo . Thank you so much for the words :)

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  8. Thank you Rajneesh . .welcome to this space

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  9. Life has to be "undeniably real", isn't it? Can it continue to be a dream for ever?

    Loved the poem.

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    1. Thanks for agreeing and for the visit. Means a lot :)

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  10. Very touching poem Maliny! The moment of realization is truly shattering!

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  11. And How I missed your posts Maliny :) Very touching words, and I loved these lines:
    That things sans reclaim
    Were never truly ours to claim.
    What can I say? Been there, done that? :)

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    1. I missed your comments too Prasanna. Glad and in a way relieved to see you back here :) And yes, been there, done that ! Keep in touch and give my love to your cutie pie :)

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  12. So rhythmic, well jotted !!

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  13. Loved the rhyme!!
    Like like!!

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  14. Lovely Poem. Very well Written! :)

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    1. Thank you so much Arun. Welcome to my blog :)

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  15. It is so true, Maliny - "That things sans reclaim
    Were never truly ours to claim."
    Beautifully written :)

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    1. Thank you so much Fizz ! I just love your poetry and so this comment coming from you matters lot ! :)

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  16. beautifully expressed Maliny. .
    life is sure like a rivulet... ever flowing and making millions of twists and turns on the way..

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  17. lovely. Loved these lines:

    Why didn't you notice
    That i was gone ?
    My screams had echoed
    Through mountain mounds.

    So soulful Maliny :)

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  18. That life was such -
    So undeniably real!

    superb Malu..

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  19. Lovely use of words, forming a brilliant poetry !!!

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  20. late but not too late I guess :) wonderful one Malini :)

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