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1.
Little girl cries
As parents fight loud -
Insignificant pain.
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2.
Cluttering bangles
On soft dainty arms -
Uncharted symphony.
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3.
Poignant rants
For once he lay
Deaf to her pain.
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P.S : I haven't focussed on the prompt per se, rather wrote sets of haiku inspired by the theme. I hope that is allowed. Thank you all for the comments :)
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Its beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Rupertt :)
DeleteExquisitely written! I love the tenderness of the second one. The other two made me a bit sad. But that is the power of your composition :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Mixi ! :)
DeleteWell..you have done well with treating a difficult prompt....enjoyed your interpretation and your haiku..and visiting here.. RS:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Ramesh ji ! I am a fan of your haiku and that makes this comment special :)
DeleteI like all three but I like the second the best. "uncharted symphony" is romantic and wistful sounding to me.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot :)
DeleteLooks nice.... I'm not deeply familiar with a haiku'c concept, but it's pretty challenging all the same.
ReplyDeleteThank you for appreciating the haiku even then Ritesh :)
DeleteI love the new look :)
ReplyDeleteAnd the Haikus... Yours are always splendid. A pleasure to read. Keep it up. :)
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Hey thanks Ankita ! Returning the hugs :)
Deletequiet cacophonies of the heart
ReplyDeleteTrue :)
DeleteThis is poignant ... the first one really touched my heart !!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Amrit :)
Deletewow. three great ones. The first one-- you captured the pain and noise so well.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the words and for the visit :)
DeleteWow, the Uncharted symphony stuff is pretty deep!
ReplyDeleteGlad that you found so :)
Deletejust can't put eyes away from it :) lovely one Maliny :)
ReplyDeleteHey thanks Saurabh . keep visiting then :)
DeleteThanks Ali :)
ReplyDeleteI read it at least 10 times before I realized I have to comment here to let you know how great it was. *takes a bow* it paints a stunning image, emanates an 'uncharted symphony' and yes, the pain and cacophony arrest the reader. amazing. i cannot stop, but i should! *takes a bow again* Keep writing!!!!
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That is an overwhelming comment Sankara ! Thank you for those good words and i am humbled and honoured all at once :)
Deleteloved the set, but my first one is so, so powerful and expressive!
ReplyDeleteThank you Adriana :)
DeleteThe first one hurt me - good work
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Sam and welcome to my blog :)
DeleteFirst and third are really moving. Second one comes as a relief. Very impressive.
ReplyDeleteWonderful set Maliny!! The pain and ache in the first and last Haiku are deafening... The bangle symphony is musical:)
ReplyDeleteWOW. I love the way haiku work. The pain is so evident here and the images they create - each one of them - is vivid. Thank you for the beautiful set, Maliny. :)
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