Thursday, March 21

The Lure


An attempt of Ethere, a form of poetry written in ten lines, with each line accomodating the number of syllables as its line number.


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Dash of 
Blush cluster
On dimpled cheeks
His looks sensuous
Bated breath loquacious
Of bait, his defiant charm;
Breeze sultry, sprinkling pearly drop
On chiseled face, it trickles down
Melting to specks beneath sauve gliding touch. 

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Another one : 

Books 
They smell
Of dust speckle
Engraved grey
Amidst tangled words
In its swooping sly waft
Hauled into mystic depths
Of love, truth, fear and fantasy, 
The many resplendent emotions
I succumb to lure - my retribution.

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31 comments:

  1. Writing is a tough art and more tough when it comes to write under certain specific parameters. Good job.

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    1. It was tough, but then attempting a challenge is the best way to flush out write's block ! Thankyou for reading it Deepak :)

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  2. I agree with Deepak.
    It is hard for me.
    Well written by you.

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    1. Thanks so much Indrani for the visit and for the comment :)

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  3. A very creative attempt towards uniqueness in ur pennings...thanks for sharing

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    1. Thank you Arish :) Loved your poems . Had commented on your latest post and has started following your post as well !

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  4. That's a different genre of poetry with different parameters. Done nicely.

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  5. Awesome Maliny! This form of poetry looks interesting...very well done!

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    1. Hey thanks Bushra . Back here after long . Thank you for the good words :)

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  6. Wow ... I loved the form of this poetry ... indeed challenging, but you made it look so easy !!!

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    1. Does look simple isnt it ? I did rack my mind for sometime before coming up with this one :) The haiku frenzy was of some help tackling the syllable rule . .

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  7. Seems such a easy flow to read that it hides the challenge of composing such a verse... Loved both attempts, the one about books is simply fabulous!!

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    1. Thanks Reshma . I look forward to your comments always :)

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  8. Tough one but good . keep writing and sharing .

    Travel India

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  9. Wonderful attempt :) Just simply awesome Maliny :) keep it up!!

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  10. It is new form to me and quite challenging one at that. You wrote it so well.

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  11. This is such a challengimg form and you've managed it so beautifully. Such ideas, such thoughts.... And such understated elegance in the words chosen... Awesomely done Maliny!

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  12. Interesting form!! You've done it smartly & beautifully!:)

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  13. This is amazing! I lovedddd the second one more--beautifully penned, Maliny!

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  14. form of poetry a bit of hard work with a good effort its looks cool& amazing..Maliny smiles:))GOD<3U

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