An attempt of Ethere, a form of poetry written in ten lines, with each line accomodating the number of syllables as its line number.
A
Dash of
Blush cluster
On dimpled cheeks
His looks sensuous
Bated breath loquacious
Of bait, his defiant charm;
Breeze sultry, sprinkling pearly drop
On chiseled face, it trickles down
Melting to specks beneath sauve gliding touch.
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Another one :
Books
They smell
Of dust speckle
Engraved grey
Amidst tangled words
In its swooping sly waft
Hauled into mystic depths
Of love, truth, fear and fantasy,
The many resplendent emotions
I succumb to lure - my retribution.
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Lovely one
ReplyDeleteThankyou :)
DeleteWriting is a tough art and more tough when it comes to write under certain specific parameters. Good job.
ReplyDeleteIt was tough, but then attempting a challenge is the best way to flush out write's block ! Thankyou for reading it Deepak :)
DeleteI agree with Deepak.
ReplyDeleteIt is hard for me.
Well written by you.
Thanks so much Indrani for the visit and for the comment :)
DeleteA very creative attempt towards uniqueness in ur pennings...thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteThank you Arish :) Loved your poems . Had commented on your latest post and has started following your post as well !
DeleteThat's a different genre of poetry with different parameters. Done nicely.
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DeleteAwesome Maliny! This form of poetry looks interesting...very well done!
ReplyDeleteHey thanks Bushra . Back here after long . Thank you for the good words :)
DeleteWow ... I loved the form of this poetry ... indeed challenging, but you made it look so easy !!!
ReplyDeleteDoes look simple isnt it ? I did rack my mind for sometime before coming up with this one :) The haiku frenzy was of some help tackling the syllable rule . .
DeleteSeems such a easy flow to read that it hides the challenge of composing such a verse... Loved both attempts, the one about books is simply fabulous!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Reshma . I look forward to your comments always :)
DeleteGood attempt
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteNice experiment.
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DeleteTough one but good . keep writing and sharing .
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Hey thank you so much Vishal . .
DeleteWonderful attempt :) Just simply awesome Maliny :) keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Saurabh :)
DeleteIt is new form to me and quite challenging one at that. You wrote it so well.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a challengimg form and you've managed it so beautifully. Such ideas, such thoughts.... And such understated elegance in the words chosen... Awesomely done Maliny!
ReplyDeleteInteresting form!! You've done it smartly & beautifully!:)
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing! I lovedddd the second one more--beautifully penned, Maliny!
ReplyDeleteIts very tough !
ReplyDeleteform of poetry a bit of hard work with a good effort its looks cool& amazing..Maliny smiles:))GOD<3U
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