The dusk spraying its saffron hues ;
Reminding me its time to part ways . .
The night spreads its tresses ever so slow,
Striking me , its time to be alone
Wait and wait do i with a whimper,
For my damp eyes to slide into a slumber. .
Funny how joys seem incomplete ;
Scary how the future seems so deplete. .
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soon to be part of an anthology-
Also you may like : http://www.indiblogger.in/indipost.php?post=91985 ., which is my entry for the surf excel matic contest. Do go through the post . . would be grateful if you could leave behind ur valuable comments on the same , so that i could work on my flaws . . Regards , Maliny :)
The incomplete joy must be an indication of more merry in store, that must be the reason to stop worrying about the seems to be deplete future..
ReplyDeleteBeautiful expression in a soothing arrangement of words
Nice way to begin a day :) good words at good place :) Nice..
ReplyDeleteIt is a poem that has a tinge of sadness but is skilfully balanced with a glimmer of hope.
ReplyDeleteNice of you to add the post script ;)
That is a lovely poem..good enough to make the heart feel heavy with those thoughts. tough to believe you are doctor by profession. LOL.
ReplyDeleteLovely....I am glad I chanced upon your profile thru Indiblogger contest....all ur stuff is good read...:-)
ReplyDelete@ gopan , karthik : thanks a lot for stumbling onto my blog . . means a lot :)
ReplyDelete@ zach : lol i knew this was going to be a depressing post :P i didnt want to ruin the day of those who went thru it..and thus emanated the idea of a post script :)
ReplyDelete@ farila : ma'm i am confused whether i shud take ur comment on a positive or a negative note..any which way i am glad that u paused to express ur view on the post :)
ReplyDelete@ rahul : thats a huge compliment ..made my day :))
ReplyDeleteDamn interesting way of looking at it ...
ReplyDeletethanx shoonya..
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteThere may be ups and downs, but you will emerge a victor!!
fingers crossed : thanks vyankatesh for stopping by to share ur valuable comment :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and a touching poem. If good times have not stayed then so wouldn't bad times. Life is full of ups and downs..we need that glimmer of hope in bad times...and work hard for the good times..
ReplyDeleteP.S:voted for your contest post too...
Life is a bitch, it pushes us into pits without a warning, but i tell u, and believe me when i say, we all get out of it, all it takes is perseverence.. and THEN, u can sleep happy and sound and peaceful!
ReplyDeleteNeedless to say, I LOVED THIS!
smile beautiful baby, smile! :)
Out of the night that covers me,
ReplyDeleteBlack as the Pit from pole to pole,
I thank whatever gods may be
For my unconquerable soul.
Dont know why...your poem reminds me of henly's poem i read somewhere sometime back....glad to have visited your site..will be back to read in depth.
sunilscove.wordpress.com
@ bemoneyaware : rightly pointed out..extremely grateful for going through my blog n leaving behind those words :)
ReplyDelete@ mr.jovita : cant express enuf how much ur soothing words have influenced me..they sure brought a smile to my face..thanx a ton for adding me and for having the heart to leave behind a comment :)
ReplyDelete@ sunilscove : thanx loads for the comment wich sure has prompted me to check out more poems of the author :)
ReplyDeletehi Maliny,
ReplyDeleteI am not a great fan of poems like this but this looks promising stuff..
Best
Georgie
PS. I left a big reply at the indivine forum reg. your review for the blog.. hope you've noticed that..
All the best for the contest as well..
I think the treatment you gave to the topic is both unique and interesting. Expression and words are outstanding.
ReplyDeleteAll the best for the contest:)
loved your poem, efforts but not the presentation of blog ~!
ReplyDeleteif you don't mind don't one thing that i would like to suggest you is to work on your webblog, because it takes too much time to upload and that is frustrating !
nice. btw, hope does not disappoint. keep it goin;)
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem you wrote with perfect rhyme! loved it!
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