This sounds good..but I don't think this is a haiku though..check the syllable...I'm not sure if qualifies to be a haiku though..but nvm this is well written
actually i read somewhere that the syllable isnt that strict a rule to go by wen we attempt haiku in english language. . so i let myself take advantage of that nugget . . i got your point though. . maybe next tym i can try come up with a 17 syllable one or maybe less . .thanks for stopping by to share your view and tanks a lot for the appreciation :) good day :)
This sounds good..but I don't think this is a haiku though..check the syllable...I'm not sure if qualifies to be a haiku though..but nvm this is well written
ReplyDeleteactually i read somewhere that the syllable isnt that strict a rule to go by wen we attempt haiku in english language. . so i let myself take advantage of that nugget . . i got your point though. . maybe next tym i can try come up with a 17 syllable one or maybe less . .thanks for stopping by to share your view and tanks a lot for the appreciation :) good day :)
ReplyDeletewah DR.JI you are doing good work with poems and these stuffs.. beautiful stuff :D
ReplyDeletethanks deepak :) you are on a blogging spree yourself i see ;)
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written. Captivating lines really. :)
ReplyDeleteHi doc! ...beautifully written(technicalities overlooked for the essence of the verse)!! :):)
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thanks raj, amit :)
ReplyDeleteI loved it...Something very catchy and meaningful...
ReplyDeleteI have never understood the rules of Haiku but love the short messages they send..
ReplyDeleteThis was lovely to read..
thank you saru and farida ma'm :)
ReplyDelete:) like it.
ReplyDeleteThough well composed, I really think you need to focus on construct. I fail to understand why all the people before me fail to notice it.
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